usafa application essay

Cogress nomination letter:

explain why you are joining a military academy. what are you expecting to gain from the education. 500 word limit.

The military, though at times risky, is a promising area I am aiming for. Not only knowledge for a degree is taught there, but also knowledge of moral character. The moral character taught at military colleges provides skills I will use throughout my life like motivation. Such promises provided at military academies are impossible to be found anywhere else. Being such a beneficial school, I simply cannot ignore it.

I do more than just earn a degree at military academies; I gain character. Military schools teach their students more in dept about moral character than any other. I can earn a degree from any college, but I can only earn true character from military academies.  Military academies teach Skills in character that I will use throughout my life. The military academy and service will strengthen my character in areas like motivation and patience. When I become a doctor, these skills will be tremendously useful. When I treat my patients, I will need to help them with my best quality, one by one. I will need to finish the job with not satisfying but terrific results instead of sloppy ones. In addition to that, I will be working for long periods of time with little sleep, making the motivation skill be put to use. A normal college will get me a medical degree, but it will not master my character.

If I manage to join the medical division of the air force, I will be helping the heroes of the country. While doing my service, I will be saving the lives of those who were saving me. I want to make an injured soldier not have his/her family in neither misery nor worry but rather confident that everything will end up fine. When my brother, Marek Rudak,  was at service, my family was extremely worried about him. We checked the news frequently to make sure that he was alive and unharmed. If I get into the military, I will be the one who will erase these worries. I will be saving the lives of the fallen comrades and helping them get back home alive. I will put a smile on my patient and on the patient’s family.

The air force academy is the school I aim for. Ever since my brother’s graduation at west point, I became motivated to join the military. Ever since then, I developed skills of leadership which I wish to strengthen and put into practice for my country. Being interested in physiology and anatomy, I aim to major in medics. Becoming nominated for the military is a big competition, but I believe that I have what it takes to get into an academy and make a notable difference to all.

(after i get nominated for the military, i send a packet of info about myself and a essay to the academy i wish to attend. in my case im sending to the air force academy)

air force academy essay:

when did you first become interested in the air fore academy and serving in the air force? What started your interest? What Air Force Career field do you hope to enter? What do you expect to gain from the air force academy experience and how will it help you in the air force career? 350 word limit

ever since my 1st grade year I had great interest in joining the military. It was sparked when I went to my brother, Marek Rudak, graduation at west point. After the visit, during my free time I painted my face green and camofasuse into my background, pretending to do a mission to save the country. In my fifth grade year I developed intrest in joining the air force academy to become an aerospace engineer. I build models like the Black Bird and build my own “devices” like a clock, electric toy car and a light bulb screen with unused Christmas lights. These hobbies brought me interest in joining the usafa since it is one of the best schools for it. I joined JROTC during tenth grade where I participated in JCLC. During this mini boot camp, I became more interested in becoming a doctor. Saw how troopers care for their victims and I was inspired to do the same; save lives. The special thing about usafa is that it teaches many careers. I favor the usafa characteristic of providing a flexible choice for my future career.

The careers I hope to achieve is a medical degree and go for the highest, a surgeon. To me, the usafa is the best place to get this degree not only because it is one of the top schools to get it, but also because when I serve, I will be saving the lives of those who have been saving me.

I expect to strengthen my determination in finishing a job that I start and strengthening my patience. This will be very useful in while on duty because I will be more determined to accomplish missions that I am assigned to so, even when the cost can be heavy. As a doctor, I would expect to deal with many patients that are injured during service. I would do my job for countless hours and get few hours of sleep. But with the determination of finishing my job, I will be able to accomplish it with my best quality.

edit/reflection from my group

for alex:
though your topic sentence is catching, it brings me a few questions that i would like answers. your "hooking/first sentence". you stated characteristics like Violence, struggling, death, and survival but where is the violence in the book? back it up. you also use used a vioce that is not meant to be used for such an essay, probably to fill up the minimal required 1000 words. you used unnecessary things/terms like "i mean". your draft is also very short and you will need to expand it if you are to get full credit. also, which question are you trying to answer? it would make it much easier to edit it.
Tiffany:
like the many other first drafts i read, all just have additional unnecessary words that should be eplaced or deleted. you said that you read many books alike the one you are writing about. what stories are you talking about? give examples. and what is the book that you are writing about? you should mention it in the introduction, making it easier for the readers like me. also, if you are to improve the quality of your draft, you should use a different voice. it sounds as if you are chatting with a friend. also, one solution is to add a world connection/hooking sentence at the start that relates 


vincent (gina did not do it): 
you can improve in your introductory. you should make your first sentence a more "hooking/world conection". instead,u went straight to the question. your essay also bring me some questions. what was the book about? you need to give us readers a somewhat bigger picture of the book. what is the plot of the story? just remember that if you do add some more detail abou the book, remember not to put too much that it would ruin the book for those who did not read it yet. you also placed some extra words and sentences. at times you were repedative, probably to reach the 1000 word minimum.

Captain courageous draft 1

Jasiu Metkowski

English

Period 5

Captain courageous draft 1

Everything that exists changes over some time, alive or dead. The environment changes (both naturally and artificially). Laws in societies change usually with the goal of improvement, culture changes with the way the society thinks, society it self changes, and life styles change from generation to generation. But one thing that continually changes throughout our lives is our character. Some change from fools to wise men and women and vice versa. We (usually) mature over time, sometimes quickly and sometimes not that rapid, into grown adults. In the book “Captain Courageous” by Rudyard Kipling, he tells a story that proves that one can make drastic changes in their character over time. A spoiled rich American kid named Henry Cheyne changes into a wise courageous grown man.

That the start of the story, henry cheyne has a horrible selfish character. He thinks all about himself, never thinking about those that lived around him, not even his beloved parents that cared so mush for him. After henrey fell into the ocean while sailing over to Europe for some education, he was fished out by some poor but wise fishermen. During his first days on board, henry gave no respect to those on board. He accused his crewmates, including the captain, for things that they did not do such as stealing his money that was in his pocket. He tried to convince them into sailing back to shore with the fact that his rich father was with no doubt going to pay them for the rescue. But without any evidence to prove that he was rich, henry knew he was going to have a long ride on the Where’re here (the name of the fishermen’s ship). The crew knew that if Henry was lying, he would cause their fishing voyage to become a disaster since they already went a long way from the United States. Henry spoke to them in a rude way as if he had superiority over the crew. When Henry was told to go over to speak with the captain, he refused and demanded that the captain was to come over to him. He told Dan “Your dad [the captian of the crew that saved henry] can come down here if he’s so anxious to talk to me. I want him to take me to New York right away.” (pg 11). The captain did come over to him (with great shock) but with a big slap for henry and strong anger.

However, this nasty spoiled character of his was not going to last for long. it was during his trip to Europe he fell off board into the ocean where he would learn discipline and develop a true moral character. After the captain gave him some strong slaps in the face and henry bled a bit, henrey spoke with the captain’s son. The captain’s son, Dan, was much easier and patient with Henrey. After a few chats with the Dan, henry got some advise and tips which he put to consideration and usage. He apologized with sorrow and became a member of the crew once he said “Well, I- im here to take things back [ the negative. They strengthened their relationship to such strength as a family. he got to know the crew members one by one and became a great friend with Dan. Henry thanked the crew member, manual, for saving his life. At first, Henry wished that he could show how thankful he was to Manual by a way such as paying him. but after developing some moral character, Henry realized that paying him with money would be a shameful way to repay his savior. Friendship and graditude was all it really took to effectively show how thankful he truly was. Giving money would be like henry paying Manual as if henry was an employer. While on board, henry learned other things such as temperance, independence, and generosity. He also developed some skills such as navigation, strength (in his muscles and in his character) and how to steer the ship with the help of the wind. These lessons that positively affected his character while on board the where’re here were lessons so priceless, nearly impossible for anyone to find and teach. Henry’s parents were going to be very pleased when they find henry as a totally different mature man. No longer was henry going to be a spoiled brat but a strong adult. These lessons were ones that were to be useful throughout his life. They brightened he future and actual made him develop a future career plan, something that was continiuosly rolling about in his mind.

Ones character can drastically change if pushed to do so. For some it takes little force, but for others like Henry, it can take a mother load. Henry was a spoiled brat but was then pushed by the crew of the were’re here into becoming a much better person. no longer did he just think about himself but also about others. He became a grown up mature man, impressing his family and bringing a positive influence to his family and eventually even his community. He realized that he can not live on his wishes and money alone. We too need to do so. I believe that Kipling wrote this book to inspire others to improve the character of the reader and help those around change into much better people. If we can change into mature people, our society would become a much better one.

reflection question 8

reflection question 8

As I continue reading the book captain courageous by Rudyard Kipling, the character Henry who is a young boy changes. His personality become totally different compared to the time before he was rescued. At the start he was a spoiled brat that was rich and had a horrible character. But by a little more then the mid point of the book, the spoiled boy changes. With a few talks with his good friend Dan (who is the captain’s son) and a huge slap in the face by the captain, Henry eventually got the picture that these sailors saved his life. So instead of showing them an attitude and calling them thieves he started to respect and obey them. His change was shown when he spoke to the captain “So I came to say that I am sorry for what I did” (pg 57). His apology clearly proves for some guilt for what he did. He here is becoming into a more mature disciplined man instead of a spoiled child. Though it was not an easy task at the start, Henry became part of the crew. His hands now came to use not for relaxing activities but rather strong for tasks such as slicing fish and caring heavy loads. he learned how to steer the ship, navigate with the stars and identify different types of fish. He wanted to pay them back with cash but due to his swim, it fell out. But then he realized that money was not what could pay the full cost. His service to the crew, obedience, and respect was all that truly played the price. At this time he was really meant to go to school in Europe. But instead, he got some education far better and important than any one can give him. He was learning how to become a better person, something so school was to ever teach him. If it was not for his fall into the sea, he most like would of remained a terrible child. His family will be most thankful when he returns not only because he manage to survive the fall, but also because the change in his character.

Captain Courageous: question 8

Captain Courageous: question 8

Even though the book I chose to read has many characters, there is one that many can arguable believe that is the main one. In the book captain courageous, a spoiled rich child (known as Henry) falls off a ship but is rescued by a crew of fishermen. Before he fell off deck, he had a horrible character. He behaved as if the entire world was to adore and respect him as a master. His mother never wanted him to feel any sort of misery or discomfort, and so with the loads of money his parents had, they provided him whatever he desired. He got entertainment from others suffering, since he wished the big ship which he was riding to Europe was capable of rushing the small fishing boats in the dense fog. His nasty spoiled attitude caused him to speak in a very rude manner to the crew that just saved him right after they saved him.

“The captain wishes to see you… then tell him to come to me. Tell him to sail back to America. My father is a millionaire and certainly will pay you back. The sooner you get me there, the more you will be paid.”(pg 31)

With Henry’s lack of cooperation, attitude and rudeness the crew doubted he was truly being honest. They said that if he could somehow prove such as showing them a huge chunk of cash, then they will reconsider. But due to Henry’s fall, all fell out of his pocket and into the sea. Because of his poor character, he decided to use a scapegoat. He accused the crew of being responsible of the disappearance of his pocket money which was almost two hundred. But now he is loosing his power. No longer will he be in charged. Henry has no knowledge relating to the sea, how to use it and how to survive. Though he speaks English much more better and has a better idea due to his expensive education, he will no manage to survive at sea alone. He will need to change his additude towards the captain and get some discipline.

family story conections

family story conections

when a group of individuals share a similar goal, their story of how they achieved it (or failed) can be totally different. this is true about all of the family stories i read from my class. but at the same time, many of the stories share several notable similarities. One very popular characteristic that many stories share is the characters’ goals and the theme or situation.

One common type of situation that popped up in several of the stories was a life threatening situation. Many of the stories had that situation where it could me considered luck as why they still exist(ed). My story concluded that my grandma was lucky to survive the Russian attract/murder. Survival and hiding was not only in my story but also in many other stories.

In john’s story, his great grandparents had a friend name Jim who barely survived. Similar to my grandma's story where she hid for survival. My grandma hid in a barrel while Jim hid under floor boards.

he was accused of raping a white women. in the state of Texas at that time would mean that a black man would be lynched. so my grandmothers grandparents hid there friend jim under floor boards. if Jim was found in my grandmothers grandparents house all three of them would be lynched because they where apart of hiding this man." http://astijohnnyboy.blogspot.com/2011/03/family-essay.html

Jim here was lucky to survive and john’s grandparents were brave to help save his life. My grandma’s story as was similar because she too had to hid for survival.

Carly told a story about an uncle who experience a similar situation, though the ending was not such a happy one. Nevertheless, he lucky survived

The plan was not successful; many people lost their lives, others were injured severely. Even those who remained in the train did not survive; the train eventually crashed into the small boulder .My Uncle was among the severely injured. http://bloggerroggers.blogspot.com/2011/03/my-uncles-accident.html

Carrly’s uncle barely survived the situation. He was lucky to make it since he was one of the only survivors. This simialarly happened to my grandma in the story I told. She, however, was the only one survivor.

Another story that is similar to to my grandmother's was Amber's story. Her story also not only had a simular life threating case, but also took place at the same time and close by.

The Germans forced them to work and said that if they didn’t, they would kill their families. My great-grandfather was very frightened and constantly hungry. http://michiganftw.blogspot.com/2011/03/kowalski-family-stories.html

 

 like my grandma's story, amber's grandfather's story came face to face with an enemy force during the second world war. Both of our stories also have the conclusion that we are lucky to be alive.

family cycles

Cycles are in action 24/7. They are sets of events that occur over and over again. There are cycles in our world that have been going on for many long and short centuries. Though they can differ from generation to generation, they always share a few similarities. Some examples of cycles that involve inorganic things include cycles such as the water cycle, carbon cycle and the nitrogen cycle which usually behave the same way each round. But some cycles differ a bit (though for the most part remain the same) in each generation. Some examples of such cycles include the cycle of tradition and culture. In the book The Joy Luck Club narrated by several Chinese women, they all have a cycle in the way they value their culture.

During their young childhood years, the mothers (of the authors) somewhat lacked an appetite to preserve their Chinese family culture but eventually they favored it. in the chapter Scar, An-Mei (one of the mothers) was thought to somewhat lack culture as she floated in her own world. Her culture absence was shown when Popo protested “Too late, too late” (pg 45).But this absence did not last forever. She eventually “came back” and that was proven when An-Mei gave a chop of her flesh for a stew. No one would freely go through such pain unless there was a reason such as value or importance.

This abandoning and returning to culture was not only done by the mothers but also by their daughters. Though the mothers did indeed try to hook their daughters to the Chinese culture, the American environment washed them away. This was proven when Lindo described her daughter as being Americanized “They [Chinese] already know you are an outsider.” (pg 253). The mother saw that she lost her Chinese character. At the start during her daughter’s young days she did not care. But once she heard this, she was disappointed. She regretted that this was the case. But during her visit to china, she realized something about herself. She realized that even though her American character would prevent her from blending into the Chinese environment, she still was Chinese. She still had the blood of a Chinese woman.